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I liked this story! The relationship between the two main characters was interesting and compelling.  I'd definitely like to see more of the protagonist. 

The font was a bit too big for me, you could make it smaller and it would be more easily readable.  A back button would be useful too so we can read all the links. 

Thank you for reading. I've changed the  font and layout to make it more readable. In addition, I've re-added the sidebar so you can go back and restart from the beginning.

Just some formatting and ui critique here:

The font is way too big. It physically tires out my eyes to try and move them constantly back and forth across the page so many times.

The centering of text looks bad when zooming out to compensate for large font.

There is no bottom padding on the page. You may want to just copy the top padding as that looked fine.

The words linking to the next passage seem to have little to do with what the next passage is going to be. Or at least, I couldn't figure out what the difference was between choosing each individual link.

There was no back button, so it is kinda impossible for me to figure out what choosing the different links would do.

There was no restart button, so it is kinda impossible for me to figure out what choosing the different links would do.

The state of the game doesn't seem to change when I refresh the page or try to play it again. So it is kinda impossible for me to figure out what choosing the different links would do.

I know some of these were probably choices you consciously made. But you may want to consider the balance between style and usability.

Thank you for your critique. I'll take your comments into account for the next one I make.